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==Semantics in the Pikmin 2 page.== | ==Semantics in the Pikmin 2 page.== | ||
mostly, the area I am indicating is that paragraph on white pikmin. While very well written thusfar, it has an almost poetic storytelling quality, which is great, and arises from those | mostly, the area I am indicating is that paragraph on white pikmin. While very well written thusfar, it has an almost poetic storytelling quality, which is great, and arises from those with decent vocabularies, however I think, anyway, that it can do with some clipping for conciseness. I am not going to list examples unless people really want them if they don't understand what I'm saying, but otherwise, I'll wait for an ok, and show what I mean by editing the white pikmin paragraph, and if it's impressive to others, I can do other parts too. | ||
I don't scour and rewrite everything, it's my tendency to read over lightly, and just remove an unecessary word here and there, with the goal of saying the most with the least words. [[User:Littlemac|Littlemac]] 19:47, 3 June 2008 (UTC)littlemac | I don't scour and rewrite everything, it's my tendency to read over lightly, and just remove an unecessary word here and there, with the goal of saying the most with the least words. [[User:Littlemac|Littlemac]] 19:47, 3 June 2008 (UTC)littlemac |